A response to Noah Eli Gordon's Prompt #5 at Found Poetry Review:
Write a sonnet in the modern key:Line 1: narrate action, include at least two nouns
Line 2: ask a question without using “I”
Line 3: make a statement without saying “I”
Line 4: now say “I” in another statement
Line 5: use a fragment
Line 6: narrate another action, include one of the nouns from line 1
Line 7: ask a question using “I”
Line 8: use a fragment that
Line 9: spills into the next line
Line 10: now say “I” and include the other noun from line 1
Line 11: answer your first question
Line 12: make a statement that is in total opposition to line 3
Line 13: combine phrases from lines 5 and 8 here
Line 14: answer your second question
This poem could be improved upon but as a first quick attempt, possibly to be reworked on later, here's a start.
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"His flirtation with disgrace was only that, not a ruinous infacuation." - Licks of Love: Short Stories and a Sequel, by John Updike
Licks of Loveby Sanjeev NaikI wake up from dreams, the taste of memories on my tongueHave you been remembering me?I left before you woke upbut I never really left.For now,I slip into our memories, languidly amorous.Will I always forget love this way?Fragments ofour dreams recur each nightI grasp for words, which slip from my tongue- you must remember me at least once a year.You left before I woke from my dreamsFor now, fragments ofmy loves linger, all the ones I never forget.
Reworking it little bit - i.e. treating the instructions in the prompt as a starting point but then reworking it to free it off the line constraints that a strict following of the rules traps the poem into.
Licks of Loveby Sanjeev NaikI wake up from dreams, the taste of memories
on my tongue; have you been remembering me?I left before you woke upbut I never really left.For now, I slip in and out ofour memories, languidly amorous.Will I always forget love this way?
Fragments of our dreams recur
each night I grasp for words, each night
they slip from my tongue - you mustremember me at least once each night.You left before I woke from my dreamsFor now, fragments of my loves linger,All the ones I never forget.
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